Sunshine: The internal narrative tangents might get on some peoples' nerves, though I personally enjoy them because it gives a better idea of how the world works as well as fleshing out Sunshine's own character. While the world-building is great, specifically having a better idea of how the threat of vampires affected earth's history would be nice. There's one case of a minor character's name being changed between the two mentions of her in the book (Mrs. Yanovsky / Mrs. Yablonsky), that is just something an editor wouldn't know to fix.
Yrael: MORE WORLDBUILDING PLEASE. And in more coherent stretches, rather than pieces strewn about and hidden in dialog all across the three novels. The Old Kingdom doesn't follow the same rules as the rest of the planet it's on, but there is very little explanation as to why. Six other worlds are mentioned as having been created by the Bright Shiners and then destroyed by Orannis, leaving the Old Kingdom as the lone holdout of the Charter, but the wording when this is explained makes it sound like the world the Old Kingdom is in was already populated before the Charter got there. But who knows?
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Yrael: MORE WORLDBUILDING PLEASE. And in more coherent stretches, rather than pieces strewn about and hidden in dialog all across the three novels. The Old Kingdom doesn't follow the same rules as the rest of the planet it's on, but there is very little explanation as to why. Six other worlds are mentioned as having been created by the Bright Shiners and then destroyed by Orannis, leaving the Old Kingdom as the lone holdout of the Charter, but the wording when this is explained makes it sound like the world the Old Kingdom is in was already populated before the Charter got there. But who knows?